The love story of Arjun

[AnthegaAnthega]

Good job for writing this story. You have good future as writer. I read only half felt like movie story.

You have good writing skills , try to write some stories for news papers or magazines. 

 

[Seekinghelp]

53 minutes ago, AnthegaAnthega said:

Good job for writing this story. You have good future as writer. I read only half felt like movie story.

You have good writing skills , try to write some stories for news papers or magazines. 

 

Thanks much bro! In the past, I used to write for various online forums, political stories for the most part. This genre is something I did not try before and most of the narration is coming naturally as I witnessed the incidents mentioned earlier, and my memory is serving me well.  

[Seekinghelp]

One fine evening after the exams, Sunil gadu Arjun ki call chesaadu kaludaam ani... 

ade roju evening naluguru manushulu Arjun room ki ochaaru, ekada untaadu ani vaakab chesi mari... Ochinavaalu local gunda gaani manushulu. Vaalu room ki ochi Arjun ni piluchukoni vellaru, local gunda Arjun ki warning ichaadu.. "non-local gaadivi non-local gaadi laaga undakunda college lo ammayi kosam kathalu padthunav anta, ammayini vadileyi" ani.. matter entante aa urilo ammayila karuvu anukunta.. Sruthi class lo inkoka local poradu aa pilla ki line kodthunaadu..vaadiki anthaku mundu  Arjun gadu dhamki ichesariki eesari gunda chetha warning ipisthunaadu.. story lo ee twist ni memevaram expect cheyyaledu.. 

to be continued tom..

[aragorn]

evaro okari story antha complie chesee oka master thread veyandi, weekend lo chaduvutha

[Babunuvbtechah]

1 hour ago, AnthegaAnthega said:

Good job for writing this story. You have good future as writer. I read only half felt like movie story.

You have good writing skills , try to write some stories for news papers or magazines. 

 

@AnthegaAnthega 😂😂

[Babunuvbtechah]

1 minute ago, aragorn said:

evaro okari story antha complie chesee oka master thread veyandi, weekend lo chaduvutha

Rofl first 2 lines ke headache vachindi 😂😂

[Babunuvbtechah]

38 minutes ago, Seekinghelp said:

One fine evening after the exams, Sunil gadu Arjun ki call chesaadu kaludaam ani... 

ade roju evening naluguru manushulu Arjun room ki ochaaru, ekada untaadu ani vaakab chesi mari... Ochinavaalu local gunda gaani manushulu. Vaalu room ki ochi Arjun ni piluchukoni vellaru, local gunda Arjun ki warning ichaadu.. "non-local gaadivi non-local gaadi laaga undakunda college lo ammayi kosam kathalu padthunav anta, ammayini vadileyi" ani.. matter entante aa urilo ammayila karuvu anukunta.. Sruthi class lo inkoka local poradu aa pilla ki line kodthunaadu..vaadiki anthaku mundu  Arjun gadu dhamki ichesariki eesari gunda chetha warning ipisthunaadu.. story lo ee twist ni memevaram expect cheyyaledu.. 

to be continued tom..

Good writing skills kaani something is missing .. tbh I lost interest after very first two lines 

Sorry I don’t want to be offensive but just a honest critic 

anyway wat is this story abt ? Are you missing ur frd ? You want to mend frdship with him ? Missing college days ? R u regretting ur decision ? R u in love with ur frds gf ? 

Enduku intha Pages Pages story rastunnatu??

[Babunuvbtechah]

Btw seek some help @Seekinghelp

[Seekinghelp]

1 minute ago, Babunuvbtechah said:

Good writing skills kaani something is missing .. tbh I lost interest after very first two lines 

Sorry I don’t want to be offensive but just a honest critic 

anyway wat is this story abt ? Are you missing ur frd ? You want to mend frdship with him ? Missing college days ? R u regretting ur decision ? R u in love with ur frds gf ? 

Enduku intha Pages Pages story rastunnatu??

Thanks for the honest review. First two lines tarvaata interest poyindi annaru. Why? Is it because of the narration? 

The story is about how fate played a game in my friend's life. This is a decade old story... and no regrets now. 

Raayadam istam kabatti rasthunaanu.. if someone reads it, they will leave feedback, just like you did. No other reason. 

[Seekinghelp]

3 minutes ago, Babunuvbtechah said:

Btw seek some help @Seekinghelp

for? if you are making fun of the id itself, that's ok. I created this account long back when I need some travel information, hence the id name. 

[Babunuvbtechah]

2 minutes ago, Seekinghelp said:

Thanks for the honest review. First two lines tarvaata interest poyindi annaru. Why? Is it because of the narration? 

The story is about how fate played a game in my friend's life. This is a decade old story... and no regrets now. 

Raayadam istam kabatti rasthunaanu.. if someone reads it, they will leave feedback, just like you did. No other reason. 

Yep narration sucks ... it should create excitement to readers ... 

The story is about how fate played a game in my friend's life. This is a decade old story... and no regrets now

Ayite aa chepey story edho few lines lo chepochu ga ... ne story sounds like daily serial .. hero walking 🚶 walking walking adhi antha oka episode lo chupinchinattu undi 

main points rayyi chalu 

[Babunuvbtechah]

3 minutes ago, Seekinghelp said:

for? if you are making fun of the id itself, that's ok. I created this account long back when I need some travel information, hence the id name. 

Sorry I’m just bored right now and don’t know whom to talk so anduke ila mee thread Loki vacha🤓

[Seekinghelp]

Just now, Babunuvbtechah said:

Yep narration sucks ... it should create excitement to readers ... 

The story is about how fate played a game in my friend's life. This is a decade old story... and no regrets now

Ayite aa chepey story edho few lines lo chepochu ga ... ne story sounds like daily serial .. hero walking 🚶 walking walking adhi antha oka episode lo chupinchinattu undi 

main points rayyi chalu 

Maybe it's my choice of storytelling. Taking it or leaving it is left to the readers. 

[Seekinghelp]

Just now, Babunuvbtechah said:

Sorry I’m just bored right now and don’t know whom to talk so anduke ila mee thread Loki vacha🤓

Okay. That's alright. You sounded as if I'm having some issues for which I need help. 

[Babunuvbtechah]

Just now, Seekinghelp said:

Okay. That's alright. You sounded as if I'm having some issues for which I need help. 

Oh u need some direction not help .. in narrating