Modati Sari Rasa Kavitha....feedback Pls

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Manasuloni bhaavalenno marichiponi gnapakalenno
Cheppaleni nijalenno Tirigirani kshanalenno
Neekosamai vechi choosina sandharbalu enno

Marchukunna paddathulu enno, manasu gelavadaniki chesina sahasaalu enno

Neekosam naa gunde chese chappudlu enno
Madura kshanalu gurthutechukuntu gadipina nidra leni rathrulu enno

Neetho tirigina pradesalu enno, maravaleni gurthulenno

Nidra lo kanna kalalu enno, nidraponi rojulenno

Intha kanna ela cheppamantavu Nuvvante naaku chala istamani

[aragorn]

[gulananda swami]

super adi nemeda namakam...


but ippudu full thaganu repu baga susiiiii update istha

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[quote name='Masala_Raja' timestamp='1341445008' post='1302079929']
super adi nemeda namakam...


but ippudu full thaganu repu baga susiiiii update istha
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Alage baa

[chakerakeli]

Bagudhi ayya ufffffff kavithvam... Nee looni feelings ne rasavu. Good Job

Ee feelings ni koncham Nature to link chesi Sync chesthe .. enka rasapatuga vuntundhi
ani naa pragada namakam..

[informatica86]

bagundi

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[quote name='chakerakeli' timestamp='1341445290' post='1302079934']
Bagudhi ayya ufffffff kavithvam... Nee looni feelings ne rasavu. Good Job

Ee feelings ni koncham Nature to link chesi Sync chesthe .. enka rasapatuga vuntundhi
ani naa pragada namakam..
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Oka sentence rayi baa.... Allutha migithadi

[iamlooser]

super ga undhi....kani oka chota...words inka machivi rayachu yemooo chudu...its just my opinion



Manasuloni bhaavalenno marichiponi gnapakalenno
Cheppaleni nijalenno Tirigirani kshanalenno
Neekosamai vechi choosina sandharbalu enno

Marchukunna paddathulu enno, manasu gelavadaniki chesina sahasaalu enno

Neekosam naa gunde chese chappudlu enno
Madura kshanalu gurthutechukuntu gadipina nidra leni rathrulu enno

Neetho[color=#ff0000][size=5] tirigina pradesalu[/size][/color] enno, maravaleni gurthulenno

Nidra lo kanna kalalu enno, nidraponi rojulenno

Intha kanna ela cheppamantavu Nuvvante naaku chala istamani

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[quote name='iamlooser' timestamp='1341447090' post='1302079982']
super ga undhi....kani oka chota...words inka machivi rayachu yemooo chudu...its just my opinion



Manasuloni bhaavalenno marichiponi gnapakalenno
Cheppaleni nijalenno Tirigirani kshanalenno
Neekosamai vechi choosina sandharbalu enno

Marchukunna paddathulu enno, manasu gelavadaniki chesina sahasaalu enno

Neekosam naa gunde chese chappudlu enno
Madura kshanalu gurthutechukuntu gadipina nidra leni rathrulu enno

Neetho[color=#ff0000][size=5] tirigina pradesalu[/size][/color] enno, maravaleni gurthulenno

Nidra lo kanna kalalu enno, nidraponi rojulenno

Intha kanna ela cheppamantavu Nuvvante naaku chala istamani
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Akkada emraasthe baguntundo koncham nuvve cheppu baa

[iamlooser]

[quote name='Ufffff' timestamp='1341447559' post='1302079987']
Akkada emraasthe baguntundo koncham nuvve cheppu baa
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[b][size=4][color=#0000cd]nuvu vadilina swasa ni peelchina kshanalu eeno[/color][/size][/b]

[b][size=4]or[/size][/b]

[b][size=4][color=#4b0082]nee chei sparsa thoo,nanni nenu maimarchina kshanalu eeno[/color][/size][/b]

[b][size=4]or [/size][/b]

[b][size=4][color=#00ff00]ninnu chusthu naa baadalu marchina nimushalu enno[/color][/size][/b]


[b][size=4]just try chesaaa........baa if am wrong!!![/size][/b]

[csk]

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[quote name='iamlooser' timestamp='1341448147' post='1302079994']


[b][size=4][color=#0000cd]nuvu vadilina swasa ni peelchina kshanalu eeno[/color][/size][/b]

[b][size=4]or[/size][/b]

[b][size=4][color=#4b0082]nee chei sparsa thoo,nanni nenu maimarchina kshanalu eeno[/color][/size][/b]

[b][size=4]or [/size][/b]

[b][size=4][color=#00ff00]ninnu chusthu naa baadalu marchina nimushalu enno[/color][/size][/b]


[b][size=4]just try chesaaa........baa if am wrong!!![/size][/b]
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Baaga rasavu baa.... I liked it, change chestha in my final version

[Sastrygaru]

baaga rasavu bhayya.. we will encourage you.. wording inka konchem improve cheskoo.. terrific i say..

[ChillStar]

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Andariki Dhanyavadhamulu nachinanduku, mee salahulu chethanaintha implement chesthanu final version lo.